Another amateur attempt at 55 words !

After 15 bottles of beer, he reached the rest room & pushed the door.

It wouldn’t move. He came to check in 10 minutes. The door wouldn’t give. Another push 15 minutes later, same result.

Pressure was building, frustration too… He kicked the door hard… that’s when he realized it opened outwards, not inside.

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[p.s. true story of a friend, who will kill me if he reads this. Infact that day this guy waited almost one hour and more pushing the door, holding it back !!!! geee… now if you drink too much, thats what happens !! yuk ]

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A literary work will be considered 55 Fiction if it has:

Fifty-five words or less (A non-negotiable rule)

A setting, One or more characters, Some conflict, and A resolution.

(Not limited to moral of the story)

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31 thoughts on “Another amateur attempt at 55 words !

  1. Sandhya says:

    Nice one and to the point. Not a single word is wasted. I think this is one of the ‘best 55 words’ story!

    And this thing happens with lots of people.

  2. Badz says:

    Hahahahahahaha! Are you sure it wasn’t you and saying it was a true story of a friend. 😉 LoL! Love the story though.

  3. Ordinary Guy says:

    LOL…. good one ustaad…:) and it has happened to me…. 🙂 LOL… this brought back memories of college days…. 🙂

  4. zinggy_mum says:

    this happened once in a theater. waited for sometime and then shifted to the other loo. some lady came and easily opened the door the other way! eeeeeeesh…:)

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  6. hitch writer says:

    SANDHYA : Thanks for your kind words… amazingly i found 4 people here who had experienced this.. Thankfully i havent !! lol

    SMITHA : your number 1 to accept, although i suspect Sandhya has experienced something similar !!

    BADZ : No its not me for sure ! trust me !

    IHM : Geee now that you have already peeled off a few 55’ers… i m loving your versions !!

  7. hitch writer says:

    VARUNAVI : Glad !

    DARSHAN : thanks !

    SNOW : not really… so much copy paste… lol

    AJIT : Official accepter no. 2 !!

    THOORIKA : poor guy ?? poor door !! lol

    MAYZ : Thanks dude !

    USHA : yay yay…. me and pro ? wow !!

    VI

  8. hitch writer says:

    VINODJI : Truth is stranger than fiction, this proves it !! lol… he sure has a lot of stories…

    RAKESH : It was not just beer and the number is just vague… but in 55 words, thought 15 the number would give the rite effect of the urgency ! lol….

    MASOOD : laughing at others folly ?? lol

    INDRANI : lol… glad you liked it !

    SMITA : why dear ?? u didng like it ?

    ZINGGY : 3rd aceptor !! lol… cant believe it happens without alcohol tooo !!!

    SOLILO : the day we heard this story… we almost laughed to stomach spasms and coughed away… and that guy beat us up like anything !!!!

    RENU : 🙂

    PREETI : Welcome to the blog, seems your checking all the posts… great going !!!

    and yea this sure has a moral.. but is any one listening ????

  9. Indyeah says:

    LOL!!15 bottles!!:D
    aadmi hai ya tanki?LOL!!
    I laughed so much when I read this:D

    another funny 55er Dhiren!:Dand a real one too:D

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