lonely without you

life is a journey, wanted to spend it with you,
you added the spice, you increased the joy,
you became the substance, you became the essence,
when you are away, there is an emptiness,
the bed seems hard, the room seems dark,
the eggs dont taste fun, the games are lost,
tea is never sweet, the coffee too strong,
life seems worthless, when you go away.
Had written this when my wife was away for a few days, this has been in my drafts for long, I didnt think it was worth posting but what the heck… !

58 thoughts on “lonely without you

  1. Smita says:

    This chooo sweet….

    lol @ eggs don’t taste fun!!! 🙂

    If your wife reads this she will wonder you were missing her or her housekeeping & cooking capabilities 😀

  2. shalini says:

    Impressive and so sweet! Do send this to your wife, I’m sure she’ll love it 🙂

    For a while I thought, you were going to have a twist at the end!

  3. Solilo says:

    BTW just a doubt.

    You wrote: ” the bed seems hard, the room seems dark.”

    Did she take away soft mattress with her? And did you forget to pay electricity bills?

    *Solilo bhagoooooooooooooooooooo*

  4. varunavi says:

    Lol dhiren nice,it would have been more better if u have omitted eggs,games,tea and coffee.I know u love food and ur wife so much but not able to digest the relation between the two.:(

    “life is a journey, wanted to spend it with you”
    “you added the spice, you increased the joy”
    “you became the substance, you became the essence”
    “when you are away, there is an emptiness”

    These lines are so sweet.

    Who said it is difficult to please women,it is men who don’t know how to please women:)

    • hitchwriter says:

      is it ??

      he he he…

      those eggs, teas, games and tea coffees were not tasting fine… tsk tsk

      not that i was doing the cooking… my sis in law was doing it… but i just meant to show taht nothing was the same without her… ! 🙂

  5. masood says:

    Why do all men invariably mention bed & ‘food when talking about missing their wives? 😉

    I tried my hand at poetry once when my wife was away and I know it ain’t easy.

    Kya yaad dila diya yaar!? 😦 Now, I’m missing my wife all over again!

    This is good stuff dude.

  6. Indyeah says:

    Awww…so darn sweet Dhiren 🙂
    Do get her to read it too O’ patnivrata pati 😆
    Dhirubhai is glaring at all the perpetrators :Dye bhai bhai kya laga rakha hai?

    Seriously this is soo cute 🙂
    all mushy and romantic and sentimental 🙂

    SOlilo’s questions are damn good but:D
    is this penance for the last post?;)

    And Wifey took everything with her ? 😆

    Dhiren you can write for sure 🙂
    Do try your hand at poetry more often 🙂

    • hitchwriter says:

      Is duniya mein seedhe logo ki sirf taang khichai hoti hai aur kuch nahi…

      you too ???

      ‘di you too ???

      I was hoping you will turn up as the defense… booo hooooo !!

      and what bhai bhai ?? i m not from dubhai ?? lol…

  7. MultiMenon says:

    Yeah,true..though am soo much ineligible to understand the pains of a loner hubby,I ges its pretty much like missing the other half of you..Are u a good cook btw?? 🙂

    • hitchwriter says:

      i m a super cook !!

      atleast i think that way !!! lol…. i m good with eggs though honestly !! quite good !!

      I wish someday my wife will take over the earning responsibility and i take over the kitchen’s responsibility !! that would be fun 😀

  8. abhisheksardar says:

    Tum ho to gata hai dil
    Jo tum nahi to geet kahan

    Nicely done dhiren.
    And i have switched over to wordpress too. 🙂

    ME : you too ??? thats cool abhishek.. coming over !

  9. Monika says:

    I agree with solilo this is an attempt to cover 🙂 🙂 🙂 lol

    but it was sweet too sweet

    HW : cover up ? what ? there is nothing to cover up ! it is simply sweet ! 🙂

  10. Chirag Chamoli says:

    Tanha dil, Tnha safar…Great man, you write good poetry. But, If you look at the previous post and this post, make you wonder .

    HW : wonder dude ? no wonder !! its quite obvious !!
    err … that is my love for her… lol 😉

  11. Ordinary Guy says:

    wah dost….. make her read this before she gets to reads the previous post!!! lol……….

    LOL at Solilo’s and Smithas comments!!!!!

    nice read dhiru bhai!!!! you love shows!!! 😆

  12. Winnie the Poohi says:

    Owwww!! Thats so sweet.. was there no clean shirts to wear in the morning ?


    HW : Spared since “kidding” … lol

  13. nitu says:

    well that was a lovely poem…..looking forward for more.Poems are more interesting if it is written for a particular person or reason.

    HW : that was the first genuine, sweet comment ! your so sweet nitu ! 🙂

  14. Sahaja says:

    see its so easy to impress women 😛

    its actually very beautiful! simple yet powerful 😛

    it isnt easy.. for sure… as you can see the women above suspecting my simple emotions !

  15. Lakshmi says:

    For a change hitchwriter attempted serious matters??
    Oh no i didnt mean to hurt you,lovely lines.

    HW : even you cudnt resist taking a dig cud u ? lol….

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