Love…

amazing  the zest in her eyes…

cheeky smile always caught his eye…

smirk, hi-5, drama it was all priceless…

being registered subconsciously…

 

best pals…

sharing things, moments, hours happy and gay…

always a team…

together things beam…

 

gestures so natural…

so known…

so intimate…..

searching for the world…

which was actually within…

 

realisation took a while to strike…

life partners they were to be…

in crept the fear of loss…

vulnerable…

 

same feelings in each young heart…

yet  an unknown fear…

everyone around them knew…

how little of it was true…

 

simple gestures looked awkard…

unrest palpable…

looking for things between the lines…

sand slipping through fingers…

 

tempest in the making…

clouds so heavy…

full of love…

poured over the unrest, fear, emptiness…

 

blooming season it was…

blossoming just began…

hearts so young…

warm and free…

only felt love…

nothing else mattered…

 

 

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I dont know what it is… just wrote what came to mind… after reading the post Oorja put up…

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124 thoughts on “Love…

  1. pixie says:

    good morning! 🙂

    Wow! very well written 🙂

    I loved it.

    And no, nothing else really matters 🙂

    My favorite lines:

    best pals…
    sharing things, moments, hours happy and gay…
    always a team…
    together things beam…

    gestures so natural…
    so known…
    so intimate…..
    searching for the world…
    which was actually within…

    {{{hugs}}}

    Very nice.. very intimate and beautiful

  2. Deeps says:

    beautiful beautiful,Hitchy!

    For once there was no mention of ‘food’…YAY!!! 😆

    Serious note…absolutely fantastic creation!

    Keep it coming 🙂

  3. Mahmud says:

    Had been waiting for your post from yesterday…
    Just came from Lab, otherwise I would had been first to read it 😀

    Nice written… 🙂
    I like romantic poems 😆

    By the way, how are you? 😉

    • hitchwriter says:

      never mind the ranks… !!!

      just tweeted about having the same ghisa pita daal chawal for lunch… sigh… !!!

      and about my romanticism … u didnt figure.. yet ?????? geee

  4. shraddha says:

    its 5.40 am here….

    i read till the word gay…
    have all sorts of pictures in my mind…
    laughing hysterically…

    i will have coffee and read this again later…
    i need to be fully awake…

  5. Patricia Torres says:

    Oh wow.. thank you for the lovely inspiring comment on my blog!!!

    This is such an impressive poem.. You are a poet & photographer.. and … and… gosh… all these qualities in one!!

    Love the expressions in the writing as well!!!

    • hitchwriter says:

      Dont praise me too much… the fan is a danger if I fly too high… !! lol…

      the photo’s are mostly of my two friends… not me… !! I just m trying to get them into bloggin… 🙂

  6. Sandhya says:

    best pals…

    sharing things, moments, hours happy and gay…

    always a team…

    together things beam…

    gestures so natural…

    so known…

    so intimate…..

    searching for the world…

    which was actually within…

    blooming season it was…

    blossoming just began…

    hearts so young…

    warm and free…

    only felt love…

    nothing else mattered…

    Beautifully written, Dhiren! Hetal must be beaming at her husband’s love to her, expressed so beautifully!

    The first four lines look like written after marriage….rest of them…you must have written before marriage and posting now! But very touching lines, Dhiren. The last two lines are THE best! Hetal, you have got a romantic and emotional husband….god bless you. Normally, married men do not express themselves like this, you know!

    The diyas look so beautiful! They look so serene without anyother light to suppress their beauty.

  7. sakshi says:

    You can impress everyone haan? 🙄 can write on any topic and get 100 comments in half an hr 🙄 🙄 and even write a poem and get Hetal to swoon all over you again 🙄 I say some guys have all the fun :wicked: You and Obama are the two lucky persons I know of right now 😦

    Well it was really wonderful of you to put in beautiful words, that can make ur wife smile…awesome. Btw you trying hard to be a JKG and win hands down 😆 What abt a contest for Miya Ka Ghulam for less mortals like us who can’t write a poem for our hubby but can sing to them to put them to sleep? 😛

    • hitchwriter says:

      Sakshi its 40 odd comments if you leave our my own comments… !! 🙂

      Lol.. me and Obama… I aint surely that lucky… lol.. 🙂 lol…

      Miya ki Ghulam not ka ghulam !!!! 😛 😛 😛

      you sing him to sleep !!!! 😀 😀 😀 aha sounds interesting… 😛 😛

    • Deeps says:

      here we wouldnt know how genuine your participation is,na,Saksh.How would we know if you are the Gulam or you make a gulam out of Mr B?? We need to meet him for that and I know you’ll do everything in your power to stall that 😈

      • sakshi says:

        Hitchy I am a mallu who got Hindi as dowry so am entitled to abuse the language :mrgreen: 😈 :wicked:

        Deeps…shhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh….not loudly woman!! Mr. Bajpai is washing the dishes and might come over to see what you are talking about 😛

  8. Solilo says:

    “amazing the zest in her eyes…

    cheeky smile always caught his eye…

    smirk, hi-5, drama it was all priceless…

    being registered subconsciously…”

    So this is what IHM tweeted? I am sure your wife rejoiced after reading these lines.

  9. Solilo says:

    “gestures so natural…

    so known…

    so intimate…..

    searching for the world…

    which was actually within…

    realisation took a while to strike…

    life partners they were to be…

    in crept the fear of loss…

    vulnerable…”

    I think you guys are like us..fell in love and married really young. Isn’t it great to go through a lot of things together? Life teaches you so many things.

    • hitchwriter says:

      yes… fell in love and married early … really young… !! on our honeymoon we had to show our luggage to prove we were actually on our honeymoon… the buggers wouldnt let a room… !!!! sigh…

      and yes… life teaches… and we learnt… hope its done with now…

  10. zinggy_mum says:

    nice attempt dhiren.
    as usual whatever u do ( write) u do it with flair.
    Wishing U n ur loved ones a very happy diwali and prosperous new year.

  11. homecooked says:

    You write poems too! This was really good. Got to hear your story through a poem. You are an allrounder Hitchy 🙂 Like the diya’s on the header.

    • hitchwriter says:

      Yea… I used to open the bowling and the batting both !!!!!!!!!!! 😀 😀 😀 also keep wickets when not bowling … !!!! less running u see… lol… !!!!!!

      😀 😀 😀 😀

  12. Badz says:

    I love that poem.
    Well written dear. 🙂

    I must say I was a little suprised seeing a poem on your blog. 😯
    But I guess it’s not the first time you’ve written one here. 😉

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